Alteration of watermark

Previously when I changed my watermark, I have a strange feeling that it is not right and it doesn't feel right to me when viewing but I have no slightest idea where it went wrong. When the last watermark was out, immediately a few friends gave me some not so good feedback. I tried hard thinking about solutions as I've never learnt any thing regarding of design. Finally, an idea to amend the placement of text came suddenly and thus I wanted to make the change immediately. The latest is at least, a lot soothing to my eyes. I'll be sticking with this for quite a while by then until I find the right designer to do a design of logo/watermark for me. The larger watermark in the picture below is the latest. Thanks for bearing with me everyone! ;)

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